Garden Walk

Brief walk in garden
A butterfly flies around,
I follow, its way
Settles on bliss of petals,
I smile, I feel gratified.
©️Aditi Anvita (Anvi).

This is my first attempt on Tanka poem, quite similar to haiku as both forms follow a particular syllable count in each line and generally based on nature. The former follows 5-7-5 syllable scheme while later follows 5-7-5-7-7.

I request your feedback on this poem so that I could improve upcoming works in this form.

I thank you all for your kindness, support and encouragement. Happy Living!❤

20 thoughts on “Garden Walk

  1. It’s the kind of feeling I get everyday while meandering about my backyard. I try to imagine the butterflies being reincarnations of lovable pets I had who have passed away– and are stopping by for a brief “Hello.”
    Art

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    • I really felt sorry that you had to recall something hurtful. It’s extremely difficult to heal from a loss, especially when one is very close to us.
      I hope that those pets would be feeling good that they are being remembered and their unshared portions of love is getting communicated to the forms of life, in which they come to greet.

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  2. Wow! What a beautiful poem! 🙂 Also, I never heard of a Tanka poem until now, so thanks for sharing this! I hope to try this interesting style out sometime in the future — I’m glad I learned something new today! 🙂 And yes, you’re right, it’s very similar to the traditional haiku form.

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