Brief walk in garden
A butterfly flies around,
I follow, its way
Settles on bliss of petals,
I smile, I feel gratified.
©️Aditi Anvita (Anvi).
This is my first attempt on Tanka poem, quite similar to haiku as both forms follow a particular syllable count in each line and generally based on nature. The former follows 5-7-5 syllable scheme while later follows 5-7-5-7-7.
I request your feedback on this poem so that I could improve upcoming works in this form.
I thank you all for your kindness, support and encouragement. Happy Living!❤
It’s beautiful, Anvi! I absolutely love it, an amazing first attempt 🖤✨🤗
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I was confident that I would surely hear something supportive from Ace and at this moment, I am just thankful to you🤗. Have a Wonderful Day💐
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Awwww you’re so sweet! It’s always a pleasure 🤗🤗🖤
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I loved it, Anvi!!Well done and beautifully written .❤️
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Trying out a new form and getting such positive feedback from the circle of people is one of most adorable feeling. Thank you so much☺
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Glad to hear you’re enjoying it and receiving a well deserved feedback. Reading it was truly a pleasure.💕❤️
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The tranquility I needed today.
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Some written pieces do bestow us peace.
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Too good
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Thanks😊
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I love this butterfly! Maybe this butterfly will come my wayl
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Yes, it would surely come and watching it happily settling on its favorite flower will somehow make you cheerful too.
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It’s great, well done !!! 🙂
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Thank you so much☺
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Beautiful lines and picture… well done… Liked it… 🙂
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Your kind and encouraging words are very valuable.
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It’s the kind of feeling I get everyday while meandering about my backyard. I try to imagine the butterflies being reincarnations of lovable pets I had who have passed away– and are stopping by for a brief “Hello.”
Art
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I really felt sorry that you had to recall something hurtful. It’s extremely difficult to heal from a loss, especially when one is very close to us.
I hope that those pets would be feeling good that they are being remembered and their unshared portions of love is getting communicated to the forms of life, in which they come to greet.
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